The Specialshipping fic was really very cute, I loved the interaction of Yellow and Red. <3 Perhaps the contemplations of Yellow at the beginning were a little too long, but you certainly made it up with the nice surprise of Red visiting (and the bonus of Pikashipping :D). That last sentence was just perfect. <3
Some mistakes I found there:
And while the blonde found the plan flawless, is forgot to account for the one slight hitch I kind of don't know what to make of the 'is' in the second half.
as if he had not problem climbing down the jagged pathways of the mountain just in the favour a day that shrunk against the towering number of three hundred and sixty-five. 'as if he had not a problem' / 'as if he had no problem' and 'just in the favour of a day'
I very much liked the Folkloreshipping one; your writing here was better than in the Special one, I thought, though that might be because this was more of a contemplative, narrative kind of fic. Anyway, I absolutely loved your descriptions of Kotone and the way you managed to keep it game-cannon. You're really good at that :D
It was not unexpected for the leader find himself caught in the same web his ghosts had gotten themselves entangled in. 'to find himself caught'
and when the owner of said hand presented herself has the girl, his heart did a double take. 'as the girl'
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Some mistakes I found there:
And while the blonde found the plan flawless, is forgot to account for the one slight hitch
I kind of don't know what to make of the 'is' in the second half.
as if he had not problem climbing down the jagged pathways of the mountain just in the favour a day that shrunk against the towering number of three hundred and sixty-five.
'as if he had not a problem' / 'as if he had no problem' and 'just in the favour of a day'
I very much liked the Folkloreshipping one; your writing here was better than in the Special one, I thought, though that might be because this was more of a contemplative, narrative kind of fic. Anyway, I absolutely loved your descriptions of Kotone and the way you managed to keep it game-cannon. You're really good at that :D
It was not unexpected for the leader find himself caught in the same web his ghosts had gotten themselves entangled in.
'to find himself caught'
and when the owner of said hand presented herself has the girl, his heart did a double take.
'as the girl'
Thanks for the reads, again! :)