The only difference is that Menma had worn her kindness like a crown. Tsuruko wears it like a weakness.
“Without a doubt (but I don’t mind),” is Tsuruko’s reply, sharp and true.
The lines that stood out for me.
Snappy, curt, but elegant and extremely quiet and understated. A great emulation of Tsuruko and Yukiatsu's relationship. I really like the style you wrote in.
As for Tsuruko and Yukiatsu interactions--spot on. Their seemingly farcical indifference never drops, but your story makes it plainly obvious that the two just totally and utterly get one another. It rings true to both their characters. I can't even stress enough how perfectly you captured the two without breaking down and dropping off the face off the earth for a few hours. Especially Tsuruko, who never misses a beat of composure as long as she's in control... and until she's caught off guard.
Even as a fan of the Tsuruko and Yukiatsu I actually can't see the two hooking up romantically...or at least, not in the conventional sense. The last scene is so fantastically awkward, but so IC. Reminds me of that last scene in AnoHana where Yukiatsu hesitantly offers Tsuruko a pocky. That's what they do... take little steps and actions in their friendships that to them would speak tenfolds.
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The only difference is that Menma had worn her kindness like a crown. Tsuruko wears it like a weakness.
“Without a doubt (but I don’t mind),” is Tsuruko’s reply, sharp and true.
The lines that stood out for me.
Snappy, curt, but elegant and extremely quiet and understated. A great emulation of Tsuruko and Yukiatsu's relationship. I really like the style you wrote in.
As for Tsuruko and Yukiatsu interactions--spot on. Their seemingly farcical indifference never drops, but your story makes it plainly obvious that the two just totally and utterly get one another. It rings true to both their characters. I can't even stress enough how perfectly you captured the two without breaking down and dropping off the face off the earth for a few hours. Especially Tsuruko, who never misses a beat of composure as long as she's in control... and until she's caught off guard.
Even as a fan of the Tsuruko and Yukiatsu I actually can't see the two hooking up romantically...or at least, not in the conventional sense. The last scene is so fantastically awkward, but so IC. Reminds me of that last scene in AnoHana where Yukiatsu hesitantly offers Tsuruko a pocky. That's what they do... take little steps and actions in their friendships that to them would speak tenfolds.
Gosh. Just briliant work.